Larry McEnerney analyses the Gettysburg Address

Larry McEnerney | European Speechwriter Network

Abstract

A writing-programme director takes a seminar through a very short and very famous nineteenth-century address, line by line, as a working demonstration of how coherence is built rather than asserted. The argument is that the only background worth knowing about any text is its real function rather than its formal one, and that an audience experiences coherence or does not — the writer's certainty that everything connects is not evidence of anything.

• A text's real function is rarely its formal one, and only the real one matters.
• Coherence is what an audience experiences, not what the writer is certain of.
• A thematic string is coherence built from repeated words, not from repeated ideas.
• Controlling the subject position matters far more than controlling the voice of the verb.
• An audience needs to want information before it is given any.

Below, the seminar is mapped in the order it was delivered: thirty-one chapter summaries, each headed with the moment it begins and the claim made there, with the lines that carry it quoted in place. The middle stretch is mechanical — borrowed structures of time and space, the thematic string, the subject position — and the last third turns to problem construction, which is where the analysis argues the real work happens. The personal-branding layer and the questions follow.

Chapter summaries

00:08 - A text's real function is rarely its formal one, and only the real one matters

The only background that matters about any text is its real function, which is rarely its formal one. A ceremonial occasion is the frame; the persuasion underneath it is the job.

"the only historical background that's … you need is to understand the function of the speech"

— 00:08

A dedication ceremony whose actual purpose was to keep a demoralised population fighting.

02:37 - The pull toward a big ending is real, and it makes writers save the point

Writers and speakers want the big ending, and the pull of it is real. Famous closes are magnetic enough to be imitated on instinct.

"they want the big ending they want to organize their text so that the ending just pow"

— 02:44

On the table: two celebrated twentieth-century perorations quoted from memory.

The pull is not a failing of taste; it is what a lifetime of admired endings trains into anyone who writes. It becomes a problem only when the structure it produces assumes an audience that has to stay.

03:42 - A point-last text works only where the audience is still present at the end

A point-last text only works if the audience is still there — and most point-last work is incoherent along the way. The payoff cannot pay if the reader left in the first few pages.

"the readers the audience they're listening for the first few minutes they're reading for the first few pages then they're lost they're confused they stop listening they stop reading"

— 04:05

The case in front of the room is audiences described as lost within minutes, or arriving at an end unconnected to the beginning.

04:21 - Coherence is what an audience experiences, not what the writer is certain of

The writer's certainty that everything connects is not evidence; coherence is what the audience experiences. The connections live in the writer's head, where the audience cannot reach them.

"but that's not how the audience experiences it that's not how the readers experience it"

— 04:27

The writer's certainty is generated by knowing the material, which is precisely the knowledge the audience does not have. That asymmetry is invisible from the inside, which is why the feeling of coherence is worthless as evidence and the check has to come from outside the draft.

05:21 - A sequence everyone can continue is coherent, and a speaker cannot tell from the stage

A sequence everyone can continue is coherent; one only some can continue is not, and the speaker cannot tell the difference from the stage. Coherence built on knowledge the audience had to bring splits the room silently.

"this is one of the biggest problems that writers speech writers have in creating coherence which is they appeal to a source of coherence that many people in the audience do not recognize"

— 05:59

What is put on the table is a simple counting run against a prime-number run, with hands raised for each.

"if you know how to use language to create expectations of coherence in your audience then you don't have to depend on what they bring into the room"

— 08:34

The demonstration is an alternating sequence everyone in the room completes correctly.

08:48 - Saving the point for the end is not intrinsically better than stating it early

Saving the point for the end is not intrinsically better, and the assumption that it is comes from studying texts that do it. The choice is a function of audience and purpose, not of craft quality.

"I don't for a moment want to say that I think it is intrinsically better or more powerful to have a speech end with a big point as opposed to say beginning with the big point I do not believe that"

— 09:02

The same speech, restated as a first sentence, would also have been a good speech.

It is stated with its limit: stated emphatically as a correction of what the session might imply.

10:54 - The most important sentence goes third rather than first in most editorial work

In editorial work the most important sentence goes third, not first, nineteen times out of twenty. The first two sentences buy the right to say it.

"19 times out of 20 we're putting the most important thing they have to say in the third sentence"

— 11:19

On the table: consulting on opinion pieces for academics wanting national placement.

The first two sentences do the work of earning the third: they establish the ground and the tension, and the claim lands once the reader is standing somewhere. Putting the claim first asks it to carry weight before anything has been set under it.

11:29 - A conclusion that would be rejected up front has to be earned and placed last

The exception is a piece whose conclusion would be rejected if stated up front — then it must be earned and placed last. A reader who agrees for two-thirds of a piece cannot easily disown the position they have been agreeing with.

An opinion column that built agreement for paragraphs, then landed a policy the reader would have refused at the headline.

It carries its own exception: explicitly "only sometimes, for some audiences and some purposes".

14:01 - Coherence is not a hierarchy of concepts, because people do not process language that way

Coherence is not a hierarchy of concepts; people do not process language that way. Trained writers build logical layers the audience never perceives.

"I come from a highly academic background and most of the people I've worked with are academics who believe that coherence is a matter of logical relationship"

— 14:11

What it is shown against is legal argument named as not working the way law schools teach it.

"coherence is not abstract it's not conceptual for me it's many things but it's mostly an experience that the audience has"

— 14:51

Concepts matter; they are simply not what creates the experience.

15:37 - Time is the simplest borrowed structure, laid down in the first word of each movement

The simplest borrowed structure is time: past, present, future, laid down in the first word of each movement. The audience anticipates the third term without being able to state that they are doing so.

"consciously or not the readers are already expecting the ending"

— 16:03

What is put on the table is three openings marking three tenses across one short text.

16:43 - A deliberately wrong word installs a second borrowed structure of birth, death and rebirth

A deliberately wrong word can install a second borrowed structure — a birth, a death, a rebirth. Fathers do not bring forth; the misuse is the signal that a cycle has been started.

"that's just plain wrong fathers do not bring forth mothers bring forth"

— 16:55

The demonstration is an opening metaphor of birth, a middle of death, a close promising new birth.

"if a text begins with birth and then you have death how's it going to end"

— 18:36

It is stated with its limit: offered with an explicit "I don't want to go too far".

19:13 - Space can be built inside a text, narrowing from continent to nation to ground

Space can be built inside the text itself: continent, nation, battlefield, portion of it, here. Each step narrows, then the close widens back out — an hourglass nobody notices consciously.

"not just direct for the ear but more importantly or as importantly to write for the mouth that is a speaker is going to have to say this"

— 19:40

On the table: a spatial sequence traced across a single page of text.

"continent Nation big Battlefield portion of the battlefield here"

— 21:21

Listening to a speaker rehearse and cutting what will not say.

21:36 - One word repeated five times in a short text is the device rather than a lapse

One word repeated five times in a short text is the device, not a lapse — and students object because they were taught not to. The repetition is what locates the audience in one place.

"the references to space through the text is one more way in which the big ending is made coherent for the reader's processing"

— 22:55

The case in front of the room is the word "here" hammered through a middle section.

23:52 - Neither the active nor the shorter version is clearer until the audience is known

Neither the active nor the shorter version of a sentence is clearer until the audience is known. Both rules measure effects of language without reference to the reader.

"it's shorter and it has an active verb. This is nonsense … it's complete patent obvious nonsense"

— 24:46

What it is shown against is the dog-and-cat pair, run for thousands of people, answered the same way every time.

"they're measuring effects of language without thinking about the readers"

— 25:05

The limit is stated on the spot: possibly specific to native speakers; stated as an uncertainty.

26:16 - A listener cannot re-centre a sentence, because only a reader can go back

The subject is the reader's focus — and a listener, unlike a reader, has no chance to re-centre a sentence. A reader can reprocess; a listener is already three sentences behind while trying.

"the effect of subjects on readers is to create the focus of the sentence when they process a sentence the subject is what the sentence is about"

— 26:16

What is put on the table is an audience that cares about the object of every sentence and hears the subject instead.

27:58 - Putting what the audience cares about in the subject position beats obeying a verb rule

The fix is to put what the audience cares about in the subject position — and the objection raised against it is a myth. Practitioners refuse the construction because they believe a rule that does not hold.

"this passive verb myth does enormous amounts of damage"

— 28:48

The demonstration is a specialist advised to make his audience the grammatical subject, objecting that it creates passives.

"20 of the verbs in that essay are passive … there's a couple of paragraphs where every verb is passive"

— 29:51

On the table: the essay checked rather than cited.

There are reasons not to use it — just as many reasons to use it.

30:11 - Controlling the subject position matters far more than controlling the voice of the verb

Controlling the subject position matters far more than controlling the voice of the verb. The subject sets what the sentence is about; voice only sets how the action is arranged.

"controlling the subject position is far more important than any kind of problem you have with the subject verbs"

— 30:11

On the table: subjects circled sentence by sentence across the text.

The case in front of the room is a quick diagnostic: circle every subject in a draft and look at the pattern.

It is narrower than it sounds: an indefinite subject appears once and behaves differently.

35:06 - A thematic string is coherence built from repeated words, not from repeated ideas

A thematic string is coherence built from repeated words, not repeated ideas. Complex information is organised by referring it back to words that sound familiar.

"when readers have or listeners have a lot of complex information to cope with one of their main techniques for organizing it is referring it all back to the same words"

— 35:27

Forty years of trying to convince trained writers that concepts are not the mechanism.

"I can't emphasize enough I don't mean ideas"

— 35:41

Concepts are not dismissed; they are just not what does this job.

37:29 - The same word is the safest string, and any associated word will also hold

The same word is the safest string, but any word the audience associates with it works. Coherence comes from association in the audience's head, not from definition.

"you create coherence by using any word that the actual audience not a theoretical audience not an imaginary audience but the actual audience would associate with a dominant word"

— 37:34

A political speech whose theme word is joined by two associated words that carry it.

"the question is if the readers just saw the word in a list would they find that list coherent"

— 37:58

One candidate word rejected from a list because that particular audience would hesitate at it.

It is a judgement about the actual audience, never a dictionary question.

41:36 - Three sources of coherence converge on the three words that carry the message

Three sources of coherence converge on three words that are the message — and those words are ten per cent of the entire text. Density is what makes the point unmissable without ever stating it as a thesis.

"the speech has 278 words and 28 of those words are we dedicate here"

— 41:40

What is put on the table is three words counted against a 278-word total.

42:21 - The objection that repetition is unsophisticated does not survive a check against admired writing

The objection that repetition is unsophisticated does not survive a check against admired writing. The belief is aesthetic, held confidently, and testable in seconds.

The demonstration is a celebrated novelist opened at random, using one substantive word eight times in three paragraphs.

The contempt is reported as strongest in one particular city.

44:44 - Treating speaking as transferring information between heads is the great mistake

The great mistake is treating speaking as transferring information from one head into another. It virtually never works, for reasons the audience already understands.

"is to convey information they think that what they're doing when they speak is conveying information from the writer's mind and putting it installing it into readers Minds"

— 45:13

The model is intuitive and wrong in the same way the writer's feeling of coherence is wrong. Language is not a pipe between two heads; it acts on a person who is already holding something, and what they are already holding decides what arrives.

45:35 - Discovery earns almost nothing, and solving a problem is what gets rewarded

Discovery is of almost no value; what gets rewarded is solving problems. The institutions handing out the rewards say so explicitly.

"they are perfectly clear that Discovery is of almost no value"

— 46:14

The case in front of the room is prize bodies, grant committees and promotion criteria described as clear on this.

46:39 - A problem is the most compelling coherence, because a head holding one reaches for a solution

A problem is the most compelling source of coherence there is, because a head holding a problem is already reaching for the solution. Anticipation does the organising work the writer would otherwise have to do.

"there's a hugely compelling source of coherence in our minds that say we have a problem"

— 46:41

Speakers observed live, generating problems by saying what a thing is not.

47:28 - An audience needs to want information before it is given any

Never give an audience information before making them want it, and the cheapest way to make them want it is to construct a problem. Wanting converts information into value; without it, information is noise.

"never give people information until you've made them want it first and the cheapest way the easiest way to make people want information is to construct a problem in their heads that they will feel that the information solves"

— 47:28

What is put on the table is work on genuinely dull technical material turned into the solution to a problem.

48:29 - Two problems are constructed in a single sentence, one national and one about self-government anywhere

The speech constructs two problems in one sentence — the nation may not survive, and self-government itself may not survive anywhere. Two problems with one solution double the reasons to accept it.

"what he's done is immensely clever he has two problems that have the same solution"

— 51:02

The demonstration is war, testing, and endurance named in the second sentence.

On the table: any message, worked backwards, yields several problems it solves.

It is possible to construct too many and create a new incoherence.

52:26 - The process runs backwards, from the solution already held to the problem it solves

The process runs backwards: start from the solution you have and work out what problem it solves. The discovery came first chronologically; the problem is reconstructed for delivery.

"this is thinking backward you take a discovery you've made and then you think backward to what problem did I solve"

— 52:29

On the table: a speaker's intended message turned into candidate problems and tested against them.

54:03 - A problem in the world meets indifference where a problem the audience holds cannot

A problem in the world can be met with indifference; a problem the audience has personally cannot. Abstract stakes invite "I don't care", and in the wrong setting, offence.

"these problems are what we in our program call problems in the world that is they're problems that are located … out there"

— 54:03

The case in front of the room is mourners addressed about the survival of a political system.

55:45 - An apparently redundant sentence of agreement exists to set up the reversal after it

An apparently redundant sentence of agreement exists to set up the reversal that follows it. It concedes fully, which makes the contradiction land harder — and softens what is about to be done.

A line stating that the ceremony is entirely fitting and proper, immediately before it is undercut.

The limit is stated on the spot: read as both ethical hesitation and rhetorical heightening.

56:35 - The word but is the commonest instrument for constructing a problem, at any point

"But" is the most common word for constructing a problem, and it works at any point in any text. The audience is fine, hears the word, and knows instantly that something is wrong.

"you can construct a problem at any moment in any text with the word but"

— 56:35

What is put on the table is the single word beginning the speech's central reversal.

57:11 - Telling an audience that what they came to do cannot be done is the strongest move

The strongest move in the speech tells the audience that the thing they came to do cannot be done. Their grief is converted into the problem, and the only available solution is the speaker's objective.

"he has just told them they can not do it"

— 57:19

Mourners told the ground is already consecrated beyond their power to add to it.

The reading that a bereaved parent is being told to send the next child.

It is stated with its limit: stated as "I question whether it's ethical", not as a verdict.

Personal Branding Lessons

A seminar on how a very short address builds coherence an audience can feel.

Separate a piece's formal function from its real function

Every piece you publish has a formal description — a case study, an update, a newsletter — and a real job it is actually doing, and the two are rarely the same. The formal description is what you would put in a content calendar; the real function is why anyone would stay. Before drafting, write one sentence naming the real job in plain terms, and notice how often it has nothing to do with the format. The tell is that the sentence embarrasses you slightly; that usually means it is the true one. 00:08

Do not put the payoff last unless the audience is still there for it

The pull toward a big ending is genuine and it is why so much work saves its point. It only pays where the audience is contractually obliged to reach the end, which online they never are. Reserve the delayed payoff for the rare case where stating the conclusion up front would get it rejected outright, and earn it across the piece. Otherwise the payoff goes near the top, and the tell that you got it right is people quoting your third sentence. 03:42

Build a thematic string by repeating one word far past comfort

Vary your vocabulary is the single most confidently taught rule that damages short work. Coherence is built from repeated words, not repeated ideas, and a word carried five times through a short piece is the instrument rather than a lapse. Pick the one word your whole argument turns on and let it recur where a thesaurus would have intervened. Read it aloud: if the repetition feels slightly too much to you, it is probably landing correctly for someone reading once. 21:36

Circle the subjects of your sentences before you publish

Take the draft and underline the grammatical subject of every sentence, then read only those words. That list is what the piece is about as far as anyone else is concerned, whatever you meant. If the subjects are your process and your findings, you have written a demonstration; if they are the reader and the thing the reader wants, you have written an offer. It takes ten minutes and it changes what the same paragraph does. 26:16

Hold the subject position steady instead of varying your openings

A listener has no way to go back and re-centre a sentence, and a scrolling reader behaves almost identically. Every time you change what sits in the subject slot, you ask them to reorient, and most will not. Keeping the same subject across a run of sentences feels repetitive while you write it and reads as clarity to everyone else. The evidence is that people paraphrase your point back accurately rather than approximately. 27:58

Test every theme word against the actual audience, never a thesaurus

The safest string is the same word repeated, and any word the audience genuinely associates with it will also hold. The failure mode is choosing an association that exists only in your head, which reads as drift rather than reinforcement. Check candidates against how the people you are writing for actually talk — their posts, their questions, their complaints. If a word never appears in their own language, it will not carry your string. 37:29

Construct the problem before you deliver the answer

A head already holding a problem reaches for a solution, which makes a problem the most compelling source of coherence available. Information handed to someone who does not yet want it is discarded regardless of quality. So the sequence is: build the problem, let them feel it, then supply what you have. The picturable sign is a reply that states the problem back to you in their own words before agreeing with anything. 46:39

Work backwards from the solution you hold to the problem it solves

Most people write forward from what they know and hope a reason to care emerges. The process actually runs the other way: start from the thing you can already do or have already found, and work out which problem it dissolves. That is an ordinary half-hour of thinking and it determines whether the piece has an opening at all. You will know it worked when the first paragraph writes itself. 52:26

Convert the world's problem into the audience's own problem

A problem stated about the world can be met with genuine indifference; a problem the listener personally has cannot. The move is to take the abstract version and locate it inside the life of the specific person reading — their week, their pipeline, their unanswered messages. It costs something, because naming what is going wrong for someone is uncomfortable and some will not thank you. The evidence it worked is that the replies argue rather than agree. 54:03

Questions

Each answer ends at the moment in the recording where it is given.

Should I put my main point at the start or save it for the end?

At the start, almost always — though closer to the third sentence than the first, because the opening is spent buying the right to say it. Saving it is not a mark of quality, and the assumption that it is comes from studying texts that happen to do it. The exception is narrow: when your conclusion would be rejected outright if stated up front, it has to be earned across the piece and landed at the close, by which point the reader has spent several minutes agreeing. 08:48

Why do people stop reading halfway through something that builds to a strong finish?

Because a payoff at the end can only pay the people who reach the end, and most work built that way loses them in the first few minutes. The writer's certainty that it all connects is not evidence of anything, since the connections live in the writer's head where the audience cannot get at them. Coherence is not a property of the argument; it is what the audience experiences on the way through. 03:42

What actually makes a piece of writing feel organised?

Not logical hierarchy. People do not process language by resolving each part upward into a structure above it, and even fields that train their practitioners to believe they do turn out not to work that way. What creates the feeling is a set of language cues running through the text — a time sequence, a spatial narrowing, a repeated grammatical subject, a recurring word — none of which the audience notices consciously and all of which they feel. 14:01

Is repeating the same word bad writing?

No, and the belief that it is does not survive a test. Asked to name a favourite author and then a page at random, an objector watched a celebrated novelist use one substantive word eight times in three paragraphs. The three-word core of the speech under discussion accounts for ten per cent of its total length. If the most important words in your last piece appeared exactly once each, that is the problem, not the solution. 41:12

Should I vary how my sentences begin?

No — and this is one of the most widely taught instructions that actively harms writing. A subject repeated across a run of sentences is precisely what produces the sense that a passage is about one thing. Variation for its own sake replaces that with a sequence of unrelated starting points, which is the worst of the three available patterns. Chaining, where each sentence begins from where the last ended, is workable for four or five and loses people after that. 31:58

Is the passive voice really a problem?

Far less than the objection to it suggests, and it is routinely used as a reason to refuse the one edit that would fix a piece. The most cited essay in English against the passive, when actually checked rather than quoted, is about one-fifth passive, with entire paragraphs in which every verb is. There are real reasons to avoid the construction and just as many to use it; what matters much more is which word sits in the subject position. 27:58

How do I make people want the information I have?

Construct a problem first. An audience holding a problem is already reaching forward for the solution, which means they do the organising work themselves — and information delivered before that want exists reads as noise. This is described as the cheapest and easiest mechanism available, and as working on material of any dullness, including hundreds of pages of technical law. Never deliver before the want. 46:39

I have a conclusion but no angle — where does the angle come from?

Backwards. You almost never begin with a problem; you begin with something you found out, and the problem gets reconstructed afterwards for delivery. Generate several problems your conclusion would solve, try them against the audience, and keep the one they actually feel. One solution answering two problems looks like luck and is simply the normal result of doing this on purpose. A brief that names the reader first makes the pass faster. 48:29

Why does my audience not care about the problem I keep describing?

Because it is a problem in the world rather than a problem they have. Abstract stakes — the industry, the platform, the state of the discipline — entitle a reader to shrug, and in the wrong setting they cause offence. Converting an external problem into something the reader is personally carrying changes the hold the piece has on them from cognitive to emotional, which is a far stronger binding and a far heavier responsibility. 54:03

What is the single most reliable way to create tension in a piece?

Concede fully, then reverse. The speech contains a sentence stating something nobody would dispute — that the ceremony is entirely fitting and proper — whose only function is to make the following word land. That word is but, described as the most common device for constructing a problem and usable at any point in any text. The reader is fine, hears it, and knows instantly that something is wrong. 55:45

When is a persuasion technique too effective to use?

The session ends on exactly this and refuses to settle it. The strongest move in the text takes people who came to bury someone, tells them the thing they came to do cannot be done, and leaves one available way to deal with the grief — which happens to be the outcome the speaker needed. It is described as powerful, as entirely deliberate, and then as something whose ethics the person teaching it questions out loud without answering. 58:33

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Larry McEnerney analyses the Gettysburg Address

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