LEADERSHIP LAB: Writing Beyond the Academy 1.23.15

Larry McEnerney | UChicago Social Sciences

Abstract

A writing-programme director addresses graduate students preparing to work outside academia, over lunch, from a handout. The argument is that every writing rule taught as a property of texts — short sentences, no jargon, no passive verbs, tell them what you're going to tell them — is meaningless until two questions are answered: which readers, and what function. What transfers from inside an institution to outside it is not a change of style but a change of transaction.

• A writing rule means nothing until the readers and the function are named.
• Nobody was ever graded on changing a reader's mind, because the grade measured demonstrated understanding.
• School trains writers to demonstrate knowledge to a grader, not to create value for a reader.
• The same facts written without urgency lose most of their readers.
• Three openings identical in content differ only in what their subjects refer to.

Below, the session is mapped in the order it was delivered: thirty-seven chapter summaries, each headed with the moment it begins and the claim made there, with the lines that carry it quoted in place. The technical third — the stress position at the end of a sentence, the focus position at its subject, and concision measured as processing time — arrives after the argument that makes it matter. The personal-branding layer and the questions follow.

Chapter summaries

00:53 - Capable people write badly because none of their assessed work was real writing

Very capable people write badly, and lack of practice is not the reason. Firms buy the intervention for staff who are about to be dismissed over their writing, which places the cost well above style.

"the writing issues involved are actually conceptually extremely simple."

— 01:52

Pressed for a reason, the room's own first answer is that nobody is used to it — and the session pushes past that answer rather than accepting it.

"You haven't been required to write at all."

— 04:50

The framing is offered as deliberately provocative, and the overdramatic charge is half-conceded before it is set aside.

"You haven't done any writing that's real writing, any of it, I would claim."

— 05:00

The distance between the two answers is the whole subject of the session.

05:58 - Valuable outranks clear, organised and persuasive, because the three only govern delivery

Four properties matter — clear, organised, persuasive, valuable — and valuable sits above the rest. The four go up in order, and the argument is about the ranking rather than the list.

"They need their writing to be clear, organised, persuasive. The bottom two are not very interesting … but the top one is valuable."

— 06:03

Only the top one decides whether the other three ever get used.

06:20 - Twenty years of habits work against value, because they formed under a guaranteed reader

The problem is not a gap in training but twenty years of habits that actively work against value. The advice handed to people leaving the institution is the visible symptom: rules about surface, offered without a reader.

"not only have you … not learned how to do this, you've learned habits that work against your ability to make your writing valuable."

— 06:25

It is not a defence of all jargon; the point is that the ban names no reader either.

"Most people say that if you're writing outside the academy, you shouldn't use jargon. That's just demonstrably false."

— 06:56

What replaces the habit has to be learned against twenty years of the opposite.

07:35 - A writing rule means nothing until the readers and the function are named

Text-based advice is meaningless without two answers: which readers, and what function. Short sentences, a thesis sentence, no passive verbs, six sentences to a paragraph: each describes an artefact and none names who is reading it.

"Anytime somebody … gives you advice about writing that's text-based, they say something like keep your sentences short. I hope from now on in the back of your head you say for which readers and what purpose?"

— 08:19

Each rule is defensible somewhere and portable nowhere.

"we think no advice about writing makes any sense unless you've clarified who's reading it and the function of the text."

— 08:38

Answer the two questions and the same rule becomes testable.

09:54 - Writers think while they write, so the draft is the instrument and not the record

Almost everyone writes and thinks at the same time, and the classical separation of the two is wrong. Where an outline is demanded before the paper, it is routinely produced after it, to satisfy the requirement rather than to do the work.

"they use their writing process to help themselves to think."

— 10:02

Nothing in the session is meant to interfere with that process.

11:30 - A text earns its value by changing what readers think, do or decide

Outside school, a text's function is to cause readers to change what they think, do or decide. Perceived worth, not intended worth, is what decides it.

"in the real world … the function of that text is to cause readers to change what they think about the world."

— 11:46

Change in a reader is the only output that counts outside the institution.

"whether or not it's valuable depends on whether or not the readers perceive that you have valuably changed what they think or what they do or how they decide."

— 12:10

Everything the text does is instrumental to that change.

12:25 - Nobody was ever graded on changing a reader's mind, because the grade measured demonstrated understanding

Students were never graded on whether the reader's mind changed. Nobody in the room failed a paper for leaving the teacher's view unchanged.

"When you wrote a paper, did you fail the paper if you didn't change what the teacher thought about the world?"

— 12:37

Asked how often they seek out student papers when not required to read them, faculty answer: never.

"because if you had changed what they thought they should have published your paper."

— 13:36

The transaction runs the other way, and the banknote imagined stapled to each essay is the picture of it.

"Here's what you're saying now. You're saying here, you can read this, but you got to pay me first."

— 16:00

The reading was bought, and the purchase does not renew.

18:30 - Leaving school is the hard transition, because it changes the function rather than the difficulty

The hard transition is leaving school, not moving up inside it. Earlier transitions are coachable because only the difficulty moves.

"What is really difficult is the transition from being in school to being out of school because this value issue suddenly dominates everything and you've had 20 years of never having to deal with it."

— 18:30

One writer publishing across a theory journal, an opinion page and an applied journal is what makes the differences attributable.

"here's what somebody's going to tell you when you go out to work in a place that's not the academy. They're going to say, 'Oh my god, use short sentences.'"

— 23:56

The function is what moves, and the function is what nobody mentions.

23:56 - A sentence-length rule misfires elsewhere when it carries a right observation and a wrong reason

"Use shorter sentences" is given as a rule and never interrogated; the real question is what about these readers makes it work here. The observation itself is sound — the opinion piece does carry more sentences per paragraph.

"They won't ask the question, why are they shorter sentences? What is it about the readers that makes it shorter sentences?"

— 24:14

It is good advice for that venue; the objection is to the reasoning, which is what makes it travel badly.

26:07 - A general-audience piece is bought for entertainment and distraction

A general-audience opinion piece delivers entertainment and distraction, not primarily information. Readers who say they read for information behave otherwise, and the editors know it.

"Everybody's interested in this, but this is boring."

— 27:11

It is offered as description; whether it is a good thing is left open.

"what I do for a living is not think about the relationship between the writer and the world or the text and the world. My job is to think about how readers read."

— 27:39

The exchange on offer is attention for entertainment, and both sides know the terms.

28:09 - A text that obstructs reading sends readers through slow-down, misunderstanding, annoyance and stopping

A text that interferes with reading makes readers slow down, fail to understand, get annoyed and stop. Reading is processing, and an obstructed text spends a budget the reader did not agree to spend.

"I can tell you what they do. The first thing is they slow down. The second thing is they don't understand."

— 28:37

The objection that reading is the reader's job holds only where the reader was paid to do it.

"you've been writing ineffectively and your readers haven't put it down. Why not? Because you were paying them to read it."

— 28:58

The sequence runs in that order every time.

"When that stops happening, now your job is to make sure that process is valuable for the reader all the time."

— 29:08

Outside the institution, nobody is obliged to finish the sequence.

29:31 - Long sentences survive only where the payoff arrives before the reader gives up

Long sentences work where value arrives at the end and the reader will reach the end; where they won't, value has to arrive earlier. The same writer runs three-line sentences in one venue and not in another, which rules sentence length out as the variable.

"you have to know how to make then parts of sentences feel valuable to readers before they get to the end. You can't have the value sitting just at the end because they won't get there."

— 30:13

Long sentences can succeed anywhere, provided parts of them pay before the end.

30:43 - The end of an English sentence carries the stress, not the beginning

The end of an English sentence carries extra stress, not the beginning. Most writers were taught the opposite.

"The end of a sentence has what we call a stress position. That is, endings of sentences have extra stress compared to the rest of the sentence."

— 30:48

The close is where attention concentrates. The claim is offered as an oversimplification and marked as one on the spot, which is the qualifier to keep: it is a reliable default about where emphasis lands, not a law of the language.

"Quite surprising to people who've been told the beginning of the sentence is where readers pay the most attention."

— 31:00

What sits at the end of the sentence is what the reader carries away from it.

31:21 - Uniform emphasis destroys itself, because six marked sentences leave a reader nothing to rank

Six short sentences mark six things as important; do it for pages and nothing is important. Emphasis is relative, so marking everything marks nothing.

"This one is saying to readers, 'Hey readers, there's six really important things I want you to notice in this passage.'"

— 31:35

A famous closing sentence of a nineteenth-century political address is graded internally, building toward its final phrase rather than flattening across it.

Grading emphasis is what restores the signal.

33:10 - School trains writers to demonstrate knowledge to a grader, not to create value for a reader

The techniques are already known; what is missing is the training to deploy them for value rather than to demonstrate knowledge to a grader. The habit was installed by twenty years of writing for an assessor.

"you already know everything you need to know about English language technique, but you haven't been trained in how to think about how to use that technique to create value."

— 33:21

It is explicitly not a claim that unfamiliar techniques must be learned.

"You've been trained to use language to demonstrate to your teachers, here's what I know and here's what I can do."

— 33:43

What is missing is the aim, not the equipment.

35:48 - Most taught rules are not rules, because readers reading for meaning never register them

Most of what is taught as a rule is not a rule — split infinitives, passive verbs, opening with a conjunction. Respected published writers break each one routinely, and readers reading for meaning do not register it.

"You've been taught a whole lot of rules about texts that are nonsense."

— 35:51

Spelling is named as the real exception.

36:27 - Specialists missed a hundred planted errors, because attention goes to meaning until error-hunting is switched on

An article seeded with over a hundred deliberate errors was read by specialists who noticed none until told. A journal article written for teachers of writing carried seven errors in a single sentence, and specialists read past all of them.

"this article has more than 100 errors in it."

— 37:03

Error-hunting is a separate mode that has to be switched on.

37:53 - Language is a technique for controlling the reading process, not a set of rules to follow

Language is not rule-following; it is a technique for controlling the reader's reading process. Rules describe the artefact; techniques act on the person.

"For me, language is not rule following. It's controlling the reading process."

— 37:53

A rule can be obeyed by a text that does nothing to anyone. The distinction is what makes every earlier rule in the session answerable: a technique can be judged by what it does to the person reading, and a rule about the artefact cannot be judged at all until someone says who is reading it and why.

38:36 - Three venues differ in surface and agree in function, each creating value for its own readers

The standard advice for leaving the academy — drop the equations, drop the jargon, shorten everything — is not what is at stake. Three texts by one author differ completely in surface and agree exactly in function.

"I'm here to say none of that's actually what's at stake. What's at stake and what is in fact the same about these three texts is that they all create value for their readers."

— 39:03

Surface is the visible difference and the wrong one to copy.

41:34 - Announcing what a piece is about lets the reader decide they do not care

"Tell them what you're going to tell them" is not a source of value. A reader told what a piece is about can decide they do not care, and stop.

"You ever hear advice like tell them what you're going to tell them. Tell them, tell them what you told them. This is not a source of value."

— 41:39

The ladder runs about, then argue, then question — and the room arrives at the strongest rung only after working through the weaker two.

"tells you what question you have that the paper will answer"

— 46:25

The weakest opening leaves the reader no role but the assessor's, and that role is now unpaid.

"tells us what the paper will be about. There's no place for a reader there. The reader has no role."

— 46:46

Each rung hands the reader more of a role than the one below it.

48:14 - A single noun carries value or fails to, because tools implies use where ideas does not

Single nouns carry value or fail to: "tools" implies purpose and use where "ideas" does not. The word tells the reader there is something here for them to do.

"Tools implies purpose, use, and value. Ideas does not."

— 48:27

A single noun decides whether the reader has a part to play.

49:14 - A second sentence describing the readers makes the piece about them rather than the world

A strong second sentence describes the readers, not the world — it names what they assume and calls it unrealistic. Naming the reader's own position makes the piece about them rather than about the world.

"In such games, it is unrealistic to assume that every player knows all the other players in the game."

— 49:14

The move is to state what the readers assume and mark it unworkable.

"This is not, as it were, about the world. This is about his readers. He's describing his readers."

— 50:55

The world is not the subject; the readers are.

51:09 - A professional paid to be right cannot ignore a claim that they are wrong

Confrontation here is not for interest's sake: a professional whose job is to be right must engage a claim that they are wrong. The obligation is occupational rather than temperamental.

"Some people say, 'Well, it's just more interesting if you're confrontational.' It's not just interesting."

— 51:16

Told that a standard treatment is harming people, a practitioner has to respond, whatever their taste for conflict.

"When [a professional]'s job is to be right about this stuff and somebody looks him in the eye and says, 'It's your job to be right about this' … and you're wrong. You have to listen."

— 51:23

Refusal is not available to someone whose competence is the thing in question.

52:00 - Simplification aims at an imagined reader who does not exist

Writing down to a general audience is the wrong correction; the right one is to write to the actual readers and to what they value. Simplification aims at an imagined reader who does not exist.

"People get told, when you go outside the academy, you should write as though you're writing to sixth graders."

— 52:00

The instruction is common and it names the wrong reader.

"You know who you have to write to? Your readers. And you know what you have to know about them? what they value."

— 52:10

Value, not reading age, is the variable that matters.

53:48 - The readers determine what an opening does, not the subject the piece covers

What an opening does is determined by the readers, not by the subject. The same author writes differently for each venue because each readership values differently.

"See what I mean? This isn't determined by the world at all. This is determined by his readers."

— 53:56

The applied journal's opening names what its practitioner readers already believe, and the theory journal's does not, because the two readerships value different things. The subject matter is common to both; only the readers change, and the opening changes with them.

54:10 - An opening states what the readers need, because their need is where the value is

Outside the academy the sources of value are more diverse — sometimes "you are wrong", sometimes "I know what you need and this provides it" — but the opening is always their need. Opening on the subject risks a reader deciding the subject does not concern them.

"Now, I should be clear. Outside the academy, it's less common to say to your readers, 'I know what you're thinking, and you're wrong.'"

— 54:10

The proportion is offered as an exaggeration and then revised down.

"That's an exaggeration. 85% of academic writing does that."

— 54:24

Their need is the one thing every opening has to carry.

55:29 - The same facts written without urgency lose most of their readers

The same information written without urgency loses most of its readers. Crisis, seize and failure are not decoration; they are what sustains the reading.

"90% of the readers of it would put it down."

— 56:46

A neutral rewrite of a published opening is estimated to lose nine in ten of its readers.

57:24 - Readers are drawn to trouble, so a story of uninterrupted contentment goes unread

Readers value reading about trouble, and a story of uninterrupted contentment is unwatchable. Attention is drawn by conflict and tension, which is a fact about readers rather than a moral position.

"We value reading about bad stuff."

— 57:24

A headline announcing that nothing changed is unpublishable, and a film about people who stay fine is unwatchable.

"People when they're looking for entertainment are drawn to conflict, tension, trouble, and we find it entertaining."

— 59:32

Whether any of it is a good thing is explicitly left open.

"This sounds to people like I'm being corrosively cynical. And I have to say, I don't think so."

— 1:01:08

Trouble is what sustains the reading, whatever anyone would prefer.

1:01:45 - The demonstrating pattern is visible in a draft and removable once it is named

The demonstrating pattern is visible in a draft and can be switched off, so that sentence one describes what the readers think. Once named, the pattern is visible in a draft and removable from it.

"you need to look at the patterns of your writing where what you're doing is just demonstrating, demonstrating, demonstrating. … Just turn that off and be thinking from the first sentence of the reader's value."

— 1:01:51

The pattern announces what the writer knows, in the order the writer learned it.

"They're not getting paid to read it. Therefore, from the first sentence, you've got to be describing not what you think, but what they think, how they engage this."

— 1:02:15

Sentence one is where the switch is thrown.

1:03:04 - An opening stating the reader's own question beats one stating the document's scope

An opening that states what a document covers loses to one that states the question the reader asked. The second signals from the first line that the reader was in mind.

"… [D]ear client, you've asked whether the new federal wage and hours laws will affect your obligation to pay overtime and provide compensatory time to your employees."

— 1:03:44

Scope tells the reader what the document contains; their own question tells them why they are in it.

1:04:29 - New readers expect their time to be wasted, because obligated readers hid the problem

New readers do not trust the writer and expect their time to be wasted, and twenty years of obligated readers hid it. Prior readers read everything regardless; new ones have been burned and are defending against it.

"here's another message I have for you. Your readers do not trust you."

— 1:04:47

Clients have paid for, and read, useless documents before this one arrived.

"you've spent 20 years with readers who trusted you."

— 1:05:02

Trust is not the starting condition, and nothing about the document earns it in advance.

1:05:52 - Neither the active nor the passive version is more concise until the reader is known

Neither the active nor the passive version of a sentence is more concise until the reader is known. Both rules — shorter is better, active is better — presume a reader they never specify.

"It is absurd to say that one is more clear or more concise than two."

— 1:06:46

Two versions of one four-word sentence settle it only once someone says who is reading.

1:07:20 - The subject of a sentence is its focus, so everything else is processed against it

The subject is the focus: it tells the reader what the sentence is about, and everything else is processed against it. A reader who cares about the object has to reprocess the sentence to re-centre it.

"the way English works, the subject of the sentence is what we call the focus of the sentence. It's what the sentence is about."

— 1:07:20

Focus is invisible and decides everything the reader does with the rest of the sentence.

1:08:15 - Concision is how long a page takes to process, not how many words it holds

Concision is how long a reader takes to process a page, not how many words are on it. Word count is a property of the text; processing time is a property of the encounter.

"Concision isn't the number of words on the page. It's how long it takes readers to process what's on the page."

— 1:08:17

The measurement belongs in the reader's head, not on the page.

1:08:28 - Focus and stress are two positions doing two jobs, and both need controlling

Focus and stress are two different positions doing two different jobs, and both need controlling. The subject is invisible but orienting; the close is visible and emphatic.

"This is an … oversimplification, but it works like this."

— 1:08:40

The apparent contradiction is raised from the floor and resolved as two mechanisms rather than one.

"There's a focus of the sentence and then there's a stress position in the sentence. The focus is invisible to us but hugely important."

— 1:08:46

Both positions need controlling, and they are controlled separately.

1:09:55 - Three openings identical in content differ only in what their subjects refer to

Three versions of one opening, identical in content, differ only in what their subjects refer to — the prior studies, the text itself, or the readers. Whatever occupies the subject position is what the passage is about for the reader.

"I'm going to read this out loud. I'd like you to just underline the subjects of the sentences."

— 1:09:55

The intervention is mechanical: underline every subject, ask whether the readers care about any of them, and move what they do care about into the subject slot.

"we take out a pencil and we underline the subject of their sentences and I can say do your readers care about this and they say no"

— 1:15:22

None of the three is best in the abstract; it depends entirely on the readers.

1:15:45 - Writing as self-revelation is the hardest habit to lose, because it was the old job

The hardest transition of all is giving up the habit of writing as self-revelation. It was the function for twenty years, and it is not the function now.

"the hardest transition I know of is to stop your habits of thinking of writing as revealing yourself."

— 1:16:03

The habit outlived the only conditions that ever made it work. It was rewarded for two decades by readers who were paid to assess the writer, and it is the last thing to go precisely because it was never a technique that could be dropped — it was the purpose the whole apparatus was built to serve.

Personal Branding Lessons

A seminar on writing for readers who are not obliged to finish. Its audience is about to lose the guaranteed reader; anyone publishing under their own name never had one to begin with.

Answer "which readers, what function" before you accept any writing advice

Short sentences, no jargon, a hook in the first three seconds, one idea per post — every rule you have been handed describes a text without naming the person reading it, which means it can only be right by accident. When someone tells you how to write, ask who for and what for. If neither question has an answer, the advice is not actionable, and applying it anyway is how capable people produce work that lands nowhere. The tell that you have the answers is that you can say, before you draft, which sentence a specific reader would stop at. 07:35

Assume distrust as the starting condition your readers bring

A reader arriving at your post has spent years on documents that wasted their time, and nothing about yours has yet distinguished it from those. They are not neutral; they are defending. This is the opposite of the condition every writer trains under, where the reader was obliged to finish whatever arrived. Write the first two sentences as though they are being read by someone whose thumb is already moving, because they are, and trust has to be built rather than assumed. You will know it worked when people reply quoting your opening line back to you. 1:04:29

Open on their question rather than writing down to an imagined general reader

The instinct when an audience gets broader is to simplify — shorter words, smaller ideas, everything explained. That aims at a reader who does not exist, and the real ones notice. The move that works instead is to open on the question those particular readers already carry, in their own terms, at full difficulty. A specialist audience and a general one differ in what they value, not in how clever they are. The picturable sign is that replies start with "this is exactly what I was trying to work out" rather than "nice post". 41:34

Put the payoff in the stress position at the end of the sentence

English loads its emphasis at the close, not the opening, which is the reverse of what most people were taught. A sentence that buries its most valuable word in the middle spends the reader's attention and returns nothing at the moment they are paying most. Rewrite your best line so the word you want carried away sits last. Read the paragraph aloud and notice where your own voice lifts — if it lifts on a preposition, the sentence is pointing at the wrong thing. 30:43

Grade your emphasis instead of flattening it

Six short punchy sentences in a row tell a reader that six things matter. Do it for a whole post and nothing matters, because emphasis is relative and uniform emphasis cancels itself. Vary the length deliberately so the short sentence lands where the important thing is, and let the surrounding ones carry the setup. The evidence that it worked is that people quote one line from the piece, and it is the line you chose. 31:21

Use urgency language, and do not apologise for it

The same facts written neutrally lose most of the people who would otherwise have read them, and writers who have been told to sound measured routinely drain their own material. Crisis, failure, seize — these are not decoration bolted onto the substance; they are what keeps a reader in the sentence. Use them where the situation genuinely warrants them, which is the only condition that matters, and let the platform's own register carry the rest. You will see it in the drop-off: people reaching the end instead of the third paragraph. 55:29

Name the reader-position your audience holds, then say what it costs them

The strongest second sentence in a piece is not about the world; it is about the people reading. It states the position they currently hold and marks it unworkable, which puts them in the argument rather than beside it. A professional whose competence is the thing in question cannot scroll past a claim that the thing is wrong. Write the sentence that names what your readers assume, then the sentence that names the price of assuming it. The sign it landed is a reply that argues rather than agrees. 49:14

Run the subject-position audit before you publish

Take the draft, underline the grammatical subject of every sentence, and read only the underlined words. That list is what the piece is about as far as a reader is concerned, whatever you intended. If the subjects are your method, your process and your findings, the piece is a demonstration; if they are the reader and the thing the reader wants, it is an offer. Move what they care about into the subject slot and re-read the list. It is a mechanical pass, it takes ten minutes, and it changes what the same paragraph does — which is why building in public works better when the subject is the reader. 1:09:55

Stop treating publishing as self-revelation

For twenty years the job was to show what you know to someone paid to assess it, and every habit you have was built for that. Publishing under your own name looks similar and is the opposite transaction: nobody is paid to care, and the reader's question is what this does for them. The hardest part is not learning a new technique but giving up the one that was rewarded for two decades. The change is visible in a single before-and-after: the old opening announces the topic, the new one states the reader's own problem. 1:15:45

Questions

Each answer ends at the moment in the recording where it is given.

Should I be using shorter sentences?

Only once you can say why. The observation that a general-audience venue runs shorter sentences is correct; the rule extracted from it is not, because what matters is where in a sentence the value arrives and whether the reader will still be there. A long sentence works when parts of it pay off before the end. A uniformly short style marks everything as important and ends up marking nothing. Ask what these readers are doing while they read, then place the payoff accordingly. 29:31

Is jargon killing my writing?

Not by itself. The blanket instruction to strip specialist vocabulary is called demonstrably false: some uses of it signal membership and payoff to the people who matter, and some destroy value. The variable is not the vocabulary but whether it is doing work for the reader. Learn which uses your audience treats as a signal that you belong, and which read as a display of what you know. 06:49

Why does my audience not finish anything I publish?

Because interference runs a fixed sequence — they slow down, they stop understanding, they get annoyed, and then they leave — and nothing in your past experience of readers prepared you for it. Every reader you had in twenty years of education was compensated to finish, which means bad writing never produced visible consequences. Outside that arrangement, the reading has to stay valuable continuously, not become valuable at the end. 28:09

Where in a sentence should the most important part go?

At the end. The close of an English sentence carries extra stress, which is the opposite of what most people were taught about attention concentrating at the beginning. The subject position does something different: it is the focus, telling the reader what the sentence is about, and it works invisibly. Both need controlling, and they are not the same job. 30:43

Are the writing rules I was taught actually real?

Mostly not. No rule forbids splitting an infinitive, opening with a conjunction, or using the passive. The demonstration offered is a published article seeded with more than a hundred deliberate errors of exactly that kind, which specialist readers reading for meaning noticed none of until the final paragraph told them to look. Spelling is named as the genuine exception. What replaces the rules is technique: language as a way of controlling how someone reads. 35:48

How should a post actually open?

On the question your reader already has. There is a ladder — what this is about, what this will argue, what question this answers, and the question you already have that this answers — and each rung gives the reader more of a role. The bottom rung leaves them only the assessor's role, which nobody is paying them to perform. Mining what your audience is already asking is how you find the top rung. 41:34

Should I simplify my writing for a broader audience?

No. The instruction to write as though for schoolchildren aims at an imagined reader who does not exist and insults the ones who do. The correct target is the actual readers and what those particular people value, which varies by venue rather than by intelligence. Outside specialist work the sources of value are more diverse — sometimes you are telling readers they are wrong, sometimes that you know what they need — but the opening always points at their need. 52:00

Why does careful, neutral writing perform worse than urgent writing?

Because readers are drawn to trouble. The same published opening rewritten with every urgent word made neutral — crisis becoming situation, seizure becoming involvement — is estimated to lose nine readers in ten with no change to the information. Tomorrow's headline will not announce that nothing happened, and a film about contented people who remain contented does not get watched. Whether that is admirable is explicitly left open; that it is true is not. 55:29

Why do my readers assume I am going to waste their time?

Because people in your position have been doing exactly that to them for years, and the distrust attaches to the category rather than to you. The reason this is invisible is that your entire writing history involved readers who read everything you produced regardless of quality. Opening on the reader's own question is the cheapest available signal that this one is different. 1:04:29

What does "concise" actually mean?

How long a reader takes to process the page, not how many words are on it. Two versions of a four-word sentence are put up, and neither is more concise until you know what the reader came for: a reader who cares about the object of a sentence has to process it twice, once as written and once re-centred. Word count is a property of the text; processing time is a property of the encounter, and only one of them is what you are optimising. 1:05:52

What is the fastest mechanical edit that makes a draft land?

Underline the subject of every sentence, then ask whether your readers care about any of the things underlined. Three versions of the same opening paragraph are shown differing only in what their subjects refer to — the prior work, the topic, or the readers themselves — and no version is best in the abstract. Move what your audience cares about into the subject position. That pass, on a draft that was not working, is what people pay consultants to perform. A content brief that names the reader up front makes it faster. 1:09:55

Sources

LEADERSHIP LAB: Writing Beyond the Academy 1.23.15

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